Wednesday, April 3, 2013

Dory and Marlin - Just Swimming

Underneath the cold blue sea, Dory swam up to Marlin and cheerfully exclaimed  like a happy clown “Hey Mr Grumpy Gills.” Dory was trying to cheer up Marlin “When life gets you down, you know what you gotta do?”.
Sitting grumpily on a rock Marlin replied, “I don’t want to know what you gotta do”.

Dory smiled and tightly grabbed Marlin’s Finn, dragging him below the dark blue ocean she started singing a song “Just keep swimming, just keep swimming,  just keep swimming, swimming, swimming What do we do? We swim swim.”
Angry and annoyed Marlin shouted “Dory, No singing”.

”I love to swim. When you want to swim” Dory happily replied. Frustrated and tired Marlin grumbled “See I'm gonna get stuck now with that song now it’s in my head”.
Quickly Dory responded, “ Sorry.”


  1. Hey Potaua,

    I like how you used heaps of action in your comments. I also like the start on how you said "Underneath the cold blue sea" Its awesome to see that you are using Capital Letters! Keep up the good work

  2. Hello Potaua

    Lovely paragraphs you wrote they made me sit on the edge of my seat Very nice. cant wait to hear more.

    Kind Regards Rocky


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